If I had to redo this assignment, I would probably add more to my introduction. After reading my introduction, I realized that my introduction needs some work. Also, I need to improve my word choice when it comes to transitioning to quotation from the research articles I have cited. I also need to add the Author and their credentials in the introduction so I can enforce the credibility of the author referenced. I would also combined several sentences together so I do not have to write as much as I did. Then, I would give more information on why it needs to be addressed because when I first wrote it, I was really blunted did not go that much into details. If I were to read this analysis, I would add more emphasis on why this a problem that needs to be fixed. There are the various other issues like using certain words too much, citations not hanging, and knowing when to stop a paragraph and start a new one. If I were to restart this whole assignment, I would fix all these problems and improve it. It also would not hurt to visit the writing center or my teacher’s office hours to ask fro help.